Dystopian SF First Lines

Today’s Dystopian SF First Lines post is part of my First Lines Friday series. The first line of a story, we’re told, must hook the reader. Implied is that the reader will not buy the book if the first line isn’t great. These entries are from Amazon, my personal library, or other online booksellers. Do these first lines hook you? Would you read more? A twig snaps somewhere in the woods. I shoot up from my sleeping bag and reach out in the darkness. The Burn Our Houses Down Trilogy by Kelsey D. Garmendia Bursting open, the thin, wooden door slammed against the wall and cracked in half.“Get down!” a man yelled. Prep For Doom by E.R. Arroyo, Laura Albins, Amy Bartelloni, Brea Behn, and 16 others Feet pounded across the young messenger ran as fast as his legs would take him. Legacy of Light: The Series by by M. Lynn and Michelle Bryan “What better way to destroy our enemies than to simply allow them to destroy themselves?” The Good, the Dead, and the Lawless: The Undoing by Angelique Archer Deep beneath the surface of the earth, two men stood of a dirt walkway. Virulent: The Release The Virulent […]

Sneak Peek Revision Draft If I Should Die

A sneak peek is a portion of a story in progress. It’s an early draft which means there are grammatical errors, punctuation errors, and probably some story errors, too. So why post a sneak peek? It’s a tease of what’s coming. It’s a test—does this work? And it’s a peek into the writing process many readers enjoy. This snippet is from the revision draft and is part of a new chapter. So, without further ado, I present this sneak peek-revision draft, If I should Die, book two in the Fellowship Dystopia Series. If I Should Die  By Lynette M. Burrows Day 2 The aroma of warm pancakes and syrup and the rumble of her stomach woke Miranda before her sleep shift had finished. She needed coffee, but the galley already held two people. David stood at the stove flipping pancakes.  “Morning, Captain.” Wanda offered her a mug full of hot, black coffee. “Beryl’s piloting. David’s cooking. Mind if I go forward?” Miranda took the mug. Lifted it and inhaled the fragrance of fresh coffee. “Go ahead.” Someone should get some extra sleep. She sat at the lower helm, sipped coffee, and watched the remaining fog roll off the river. “Peace […]

Despite All That 2020 has Thrown at Us

The pumpkins and witches and goblins are out. That means it’s the end of October 2020. What progress can I report? Well, a lot and not a lot. But it’s 2020, so that has to be okay. And when I looked back at it, October was a productive month in despite all that 2020 has thrown at us and the world. Life Goes On This month my back-up computer died a permanent death. The toilet started running. And my yard improvement project increased my water bill zoomed to the ceiling. Oh, right, and we have cars that need fixed or service and a dog that got injured. (No worries—he’s healing.) Just usual life stuff that normally would be a mild-to-moderate irritant. In 2020—well, I took a deep breath and am addressing each issue as I can.  Making Last month after I finished the rough draft of If I Should Die, the second book of the Fellowship Dystopia series, I let the story “rest.” That means I didn’t look at it and tried not to think about it for four weeks. I studied front and back matter for books. Planned how I’d revise that material in my own books. And I […]